Bang! I woke up
We need to get out of here quickly as we can ok. get out of bed now.
My mum said with fear on her face.
What happened mum, what's wrong.
The war has begun. We need to get out of here. Where's sis and dad?
They're in the hideout ok.
Bang! It went again.
We have no time, let's go. As I hope out of bed I hear people
Running in to our house.
Okay we need to get to the hideout before they find us
Okay lets go now okay. M...m...mum.
Yes, here, upstairs
Bang! Mum
but when I looked behind me…
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