Once i was at the snow for winter but it turned out that the snow was ice.
We just brok the ice then swam in it because if we didnt there was no point
of going. Then i got in the frozen water ice but first i striped the ice . Then i got
excited that we swam in the water for the first time. Then my legs were so cold
that my legs were felt like rubber so i desited to swim around a little bit ton warm
my self up then ahhhhhh help someone is grabbing me help someone.
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