Sunday, June 9, 2019

100WC #34 - Caitlyn Kampenhout


“Hurry up Emma, I,am going to start mako mermaids now ,
ok ok I'm here I got you a glass of water Emma says sitting down” 
“Far out Emma how many times do I have to tell you I only like ice ,
Well since the movie has already started I am going to need to do it myself ,
Wait what did you just say  I said I am going to need to do it myself.
 So right before Emma's eyes I did it  Emma said it looks just like a glass of water
 how do you do that Emma says walking away quietly. 
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1 comment:

  1. UnknownJune 16, 2019 at 3:04 AM

    Hi Caitlyn,
    Thanks for sharing this week.
    I wonder if your writing could have had more impact for me the reader if you'd not used as much direct speech. If you do use speech, remember to maintain correct punctuation. It gets a little confusing otherwise.
    Jackie (Team 100WC)
    New Plymouth

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