It was a breezy morning at the zoo, Laleee the Koloa was talking to his friend Elly the Elephant.
When Cola the Dodo announced that there had been a HUGE fight in the Lion pen.
“Really?!” Shouted Lalee. “ Is that true?”
“Yes!!!” He yelled. “I saw it with my own eyes!”
They ran over to the Lion pen not knowing what might happen to them.
Fixing problems were their specialties.
When they got there they couldn’t believe their eyes, the pen had been destroyed.
Then the Elephant delivered his speech.
Gentlemen, is it right to fight for a girl? Or to fight for popularity-
Monday, June 15, 2020
100WC - Week #38 - Samara
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Hi Samara,
ReplyDeleteOh dear, I can imagine the animals fighting amongst each other and destroying the pen! Great detail.
I'd love to hear the other animals' response to the elephant's question (especially the koala, since I am an Aussie). Maybe that's something you could write as a longer piece, as you managed to pique my interest?
Well done,
Michelle, Team 100wc,
Melbourne, Australia