Tuesday, September 25, 2018
100WC WEEK #3 Aidan TRUCK WARS
“PASS the truck now Bob”. “Your going to have catch it , John”. “MUMMY HE WONT GIVE ME THE TRUCK”. “ Bob give him the truck. “ Good luck mummy, I’ve got a remote”. “I’ll get it john, come here you rascal”. “Move you stupid truck move”, “ GOT IT”! “ BUT IT SEEMED TO BE GOING BACKWARDS”. “Here you go John”. BRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR”, “MUMMY !!!!!!!!!!! Bob stole the toy truck again”. “ RIGHT I’M GETTING THE SECOND REMOTE”!!!!!!!!!!!! “ Oh no your not getting that second remote”. “I don't need to, I already have it . “Now come here”,”no come here “. “ OH NO !!!!!!!!!!! IT'S FALLEN OFF THE VERANDA.
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This is a really good story i like how you put the characters, And why i picked this to comment on is because my name is Aiden too but spelt Aden.
ReplyDeleteHello Aiden, The funny thing is i feel like I’m typing to myself because my name is Aden too. I really liked this story because of the characters. What I’m looking forward to in the future is more characters or even more action.
ReplyDeleteI really like the detail and the title good job keep writing
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