Tuesday, February 11, 2020

100WC week #20 Bailee


“Go away” .I growl at my sister. I have just finished tidying my room and she is messing it up, “ But why doesn't he have to go” she yells back pointing at my brother.”because he isn’t making a mess in my room”. I yell as if it was obvious.”fine “, she says then retreating out of my room. Finally I said to my Brother, "she left". I continued to brush my hair then next minute something was flying at us, and as it flew towards us I couldn’t see what it was . Wait a second ,is that my cat ,"shoo"

2 comments:

  1. Hi Bailee,
    You did an amazing story.
    I especially liked the first half.
    Keep writing!
    From,
    Madi

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  2. Bailee,
    Good job! The story is really interesting, and I couldn't believe it was a cat? Keep on writing!
    Jp.

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