Tuesday, February 4, 2020

100WC-week # 19- Bailee

I was sitting on my bed as disappointed as a chicken when it finds out it can’t fly “ I’ve been waiting forever” I say to my Dad as he stares out the window in horror. Although it was Saturday nothing was open the warehouse, unichem, wagon wheel  all closed. Something weird had happened and I was determined to find out what. Maybe a robbery and the whole towns in lock down or a bomb left in town I don’t know .Meanwhile I was having all these thoughts dad was looking on stuff and realized that we took the wrong car. “DAD!"  

2 comments:

  1. Bailee, I really liked the way you listed all the shops and thought of the possible reasons why there shut nice job, Harlan.

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  2. Really good descriptive writing, Bailee. You carefully explore all the possibilities as to why nothing is open. I also like your comment about the chicken in the first sentence. It tells you everything about disappointment in one short phrase. Well done.

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