Tuesday, February 4, 2020

100WC-week #19 Harry

I waked up and its a Saturday morning i was thinking why don't i go to the shop’s. So i went down to the store and walk to the main street and nothing was open i mean nothing was OPEN! I cant believe what i was seeing Then i thought i will go home. But i said inside of me but it is Saturday morning.So i slowly walked home went back around the corner back home.And i got home and i opened the door and yelled Mum!!! The shops where not open!! “Mum said okay” So i went back in side to make some blue berry muffin’s.

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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 11, 2020 at 3:02 PM

    Hi Harry
    I really like your writing because you he slowly walked home instead of just walking home .
    from Ayden

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 11, 2020 at 3:15 PM

    Hi Harry I really liked reading your writing because I had this experience before a few months ago,i really liked the way you still got a muffin even though the shops were closed,It was especially good because the story did not end up with you having a empty stomach,From Jeremy.

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