Tuesday, February 4, 2020
100wc-week # 19 - Carla
A little while after I got my horse my mum said. You need to get a new saddle to ride your horse without a saddle. I said ok so I went. When I arrived I was beside the shop and said although it was saturday nothing was open so I went back to my home back on my horse with no saddle on and said it wasn't open to my Mum. You look sad. I am. I said to mum so on monday i went back to the same shop and it was opened yay i said finally.
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Carla,
ReplyDeletegood job. I loved how your story started off sad but finished with a happy ending. In the future to improve your writing maybe you could make sure your putting in those capital letters , but over all amazing story.
From Bailee