Thursday, February 20, 2020

100WC-week 21 Aiden

Today I was on my way to my friend's house when a duck flew into my car window. “Woah I say” as it sits on the passenger seat quack! quack! Next thing you know a pink car came speeding! Past me and then 3 police cars came speeding! Past me “omg I say”. A really dusty sand storm” I yell then something sang a really painful song that hypnotised me into making me quack like a duck quack! Worst day ever. Once I got there I looked like a duck so he said what happened to you nothing I said.

1 comment:

  1. hi Aiden,I really liked the part where a duck flew Into your car. why did you look like a duck at the end?

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