Thursday, February 13, 2020
100WC-Week#20 - Alex
I woke up and I was lying on the floor in the middle of my room well I thought I was. Then I nodded off to sleep then I jolted up I looked around and wondered. Where could I be.Then I realised I was outside then something was in the bushes then I turned around then a cat waddled out and it and it followed me.As we walked home I saw something in the sky it was big and ...as it flew towards I couldn't see what it was then BOOM!!!!!.Poof we disappeared.We had fainted.
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So much is going on in your story Alex! There is suspense and action and very good use of surprise. I was worried when you and the cat disappeared, but relieved to hear it was only because you had fainted. I particularly liked your use of the word ‘waddled’ to describe the cat moving. I can just picture it!
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HI Alex good work the action twists and turns and the part with the cat and it waddled out of the bush it was funny Addison
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