Sunday, September 22, 2019

100WC #3-Emma



One beautiful spring morning a young lady called Kate Barlow greedily took a yellow Gemstone! A man named Sam who was shot dead on a boat , warned Kate Barlow that if she took the yellow Gemstone a bicycle will drop on her head and she would look desperate for the rest of eternity! But of course Kate Barlow didn't listen so from that day on every bicycle would drop on her head and she would always look desperate! In Gallipoli a war was going on so Kate Barlow thought to herself I’m sick of suffering! So Kate Barlow flew to Gallipoli and stood in the middle of the war and got shot dead!

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