̈ Mmm what's
that smell? ¨Said Abbie as Kaylah walks out with a plate filled with avocado
toast. ̈are we ready, ̈ Kaylah screamed, ̈ Yes!̈ we all replied. As Kaylah starts the story we
all reach for a slice of avocado toast, ¨Bones where
everywhere,̈ Kaylah whispered. ̈as seahorses leaped out of the water an
elephant came frolicking out of the jungle,̈
¨this story
is weird,¨ said Ruby,
¨and boring
said,¨ Abbie, ¨just wait,¨ replied Kaylah,¨okay so….¨ Kaylah continued ,¨as the
elephant kept walking by the seashore it noticed that the more it walked the
darker it got, It soon became pitch black………..the end,¨
¨ummm okay,¨
said Abbie,¨that was the worst story Ive ever heard!¨
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