Sunday, September 22, 2019

100WC-week#3 caitlyn


The mystery bombing 
The town siren went off and we got warned that we might die , we are under attack.  (it goes off when there is an emergency)   and everyone started to go ballistic bang right beside me was a bicycle that blew up shooting parts everywhere , the yellow handlebar came flying towards me .
I greedily snuck into someone's house looking for some weapons ,on my way in right in front of me was a jar of lollies I was  desperate so I grabbed one and continued to look …….
To be continued


2 comments:

  1. Hi Caitlyn,
    I liked the creativity in your story!
    Is a War or a battle happening? what helped you make this story?
    Will there be a part 2?
    I hope you will be able to continue on the next 100wc.
    Maybe you can check out my 100wc on
    https://kidblog.org/class/7th-grade-english-19-20/posts/dizvrm2kypqr9tdd69cgavv4u

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  2. Dear Caitlyn,
    I like how you ended your story with a to be continued. I also like how many parts started flying at you. Do you usually end your story with to be continued? Also will you have a second one?
    Come check mine out at
    https://kidblog.org/class/7th-grade-english-19-20/posts/5on1b64zwy5zfff031hsmw32oout my 100 wc

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