Sunday, September 22, 2019

100WC Isabella dryland

As I warned my brother to not eat my banana muffins because they were for camp he greedily stuffed two in his mouth and ran away. I was so mad that I went to the garage and grabbed my yellow helmet and got my bicycle and I went to the park. As I was heading to the park I went passed a jewelry store and saw a magnificent ring, I was that desperate for the ring that I stole it ………… to be continued.
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  1. AnonymousSeptember 25, 2019 at 8:41 AM

    hi Isabella,
    I really liked your story, i expeccially really liked the cliffhanger.
    What inspired you to make this story? from a book or a story? I would love to know.
    I hope you continue your story on the next 100wc!
    Maybe you could check out my story on
    https://kidblog.org/class/7th-grade-english-19-20/posts/dizvrm2kypqr9tdd69cgavv4u

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