Walking down by the markets I start to
feel jealous over this beautiful bracelet all my friends were buying and having
matching ones too. I was so desperate I greedily grabbed it and ran, luckily no
one saw me (Well hopefully not.) I pulled up to my bicycle and
biked my heart out until I got home. It was a kind of yellow gold
colour with beautiful diamonds and with a name engraved on the back saying wait
what that's not a name it says "I warned you" all of a sudden the
lights turned off and I saw a dark figure in the distance wait a minute
AHHHHHHHHHH
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