Sunday, May 5, 2019

100WC - Abby


We are going to the zoo today. Leo had a greasy sausage and Cole wanted to see the monkeys. We stand next to the cage while Dad tries to take a photo. A baby monkey saw the sausage and grabs it. The brown baby monkey then leaps out of the cage onto a giraffe. The zoo keeper shouts, “Hey Salt, come have this melted ice cream”. Salt climbs down the giraffe’s neck and just when he was about to take it the zoo keeper puts him in his cage. Well I think we should go and look at the hippos.

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