Sunday, May 26, 2019
100WC - Week #32 - Biankha
was going to school on my scooter with my extremely hot laté my laté tiped all over me and I fell in a rose bush then I turned transparent I was so excited but I ended up late to school I was like ten minutes late but I just said i was at the dentist but then I wrote what i did for free writing when I turned transparent i was losing control and im fell over a couple of times but I did it so excitedly witch is weird I think when I got to class i was fine
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i like how you made it very discripteve and you really painted a picture in my mind.-Abbie
ReplyDeleteBiankha,
ReplyDeleteWOW! The narrator certainly had a rough go of it. I guess being transparent could have its ups and downs.
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA