Dad can I please get some salt and vinegar chips .(said the little
boy ploitley)
Yes son but make sure If your getting some don’t get a big bag tho
.(dad whispered)
Hey dad .(said the little boy) Yes son .(the dad said) I love you
more than mum but don’t tell her that ok .(said the little boy) So the boy got
then and opened It and the chips were brown. (said the boy) And there also
melted that's strange and also very greasy .(said the little boy) Dad
Instead can we go to the zoo .(said the little boy) Sure son come on what are
you waiting for .(said the dad) (2 hours later) Dad look there’s a GIRAFFE on
the loss OH NO it got ran over that’s it sad .(said the little boy)
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