There was this place me and my family went to it was called the zoo it was a weird place and had all these animals like tigers and cheta oh i mean cheetah and lots more i loved it in till i saw a friend from school well not really my friend it was a bully. There was this really tall giraffe like huge and everyone was shocked but when the kid from my class Loki had saw it since he was a glasses and straight clothes boy the giraffe named Gerald thought it was hilarious Gerald just couldn’t stop laughing it was funny to watch Gerald sounded like “grrrhaha grhaha”but when Loki left he stopped and looked at me “grhahah grhaha” oh my gosh
Wednesday, May 15, 2019
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Hi Keira! I really enjoyed your story! It makes me think of Barbie Life in the Dreamhouse when the animals laugh. Is Loki the bully that got laughed at by a giarffe?
ReplyDeleteAva
5th Grade
Illinois, USA