Sunday, May 5, 2019

100WC - Kate Week #29


“Where is the fondant,” moand Angelina, as she quickly zips around the grocery store. “Found it,” she said in relief, “ok is that everything,” angelina says as she take out the shopping list, “fondant check, brown sugar check, salt check, yellow food dye check, oil check, butter check, ok that's everything.” when she got to the car something dropped to her from the bag onto her new pair of jeans, so she looked in and she saw that the butter had melted, “oh no now my new jeans are all greasy.” “well the giraffe cake hasn't come to plan,” she says as she packs the boot.





1 comment:

  1. Kate,
    I like how I felt like I was right there with the narrator as she went through her grocery list step by step checking each item off. I was curious about what the recipe would be, and at the end it was revealed! One of the things I love about reading pieces from around the world is the use of language. In the USA the word BOOT is a long item we wear on our feet in the winter and the word TRUNK is the back part of a car where you pack your groceries. The word BOOT can also mean to kick someone out, and the word TRUNK is also a part of an elephant. Isn't language amazing?!
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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