Saturday, May 4, 2019

100WC Week #28 - Natasha




One day in the universe called PHLI on the planet COMPASH.
I walked into a part of the planet where It looked like the trees roots had grown huge but when I went up to one It looked at me then it looked down then it came charging at me. I started running I was so thankful that this planet has oxygen I ran into my spaceship and shut the door then looked out the window all of the aliens where running towards my ship.



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  1. AnonymousMay 13, 2019 at 8:28 AM

    your piece was very good but maybe add a bit more sentence variaty.
    From angelo

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