Tuesday, November 13, 2018

100WC Week #10 - Olivia

One day an old lady saw a gorilla in her house chasing her and probably trying to eat the little lady. She was running as fast as her legs could carry her. The gorilla grabbed her pretty yellow dress but the dress was made of silk, very delicate so it ripped. The gorilla chased her past a house made of bricks and then she ran right around the gorilla and fell down a hole. The gorilla was so fat and big he couldn't fit down the hole but she could. She was so small she just slipped in the hole.

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