Monday, November 5, 2018
100WC Week #9 - Lucian
There was a restaurant that my family would go to, every fortnight. There was also a door at the back of the restaurant, people told rumors about that door. Everyone's ideas were dumb, I think it's just another way of getting into the kitchen or were they kept their food. I wondered what was behind the door all the time every time me and my family went to this restaurant. One day I saw a employee walk over towards the door. He looked around the room and opened the door. He opened the door wide open. I couldn’t believe my eyes.
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Hello Lucian,
ReplyDeleteYour ability to build your storyline demonstrates your growing skills in writing. You set the scene, your family routines and a mystery. Well done.
Your open ended story certainly set my mind wondering what was so surprising behind the restaurant door. If it were to continue, it could head in a number of directions. The open ended story can be a great way to engage your readers and have them hoping the story will continue. Again, well done.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hello Lucian,
ReplyDeleteYour ability to build your storyline demonstrates your growing skills in writing. You set the scene, your family routines and a mystery. Well done.
Your open ended story certainly set my mind wondering what was so surprising behind the restaurant door. If it were to continue, it could head in a number of directions. The open ended story can be a great way to engage your readers and have them hoping the story will continue. Again, well done.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia