Thursday, November 15, 2018
100WC - Week #10, Brooklyn
One day there was this little boy. He went out into the wide world in York. He said something to me and next minute I know he was a gorilla jumping around my bedroom jumping up again. He was breaking everything even on my bed and then he fell off. Mum came to see what happened but it was too late the room was trashed and the gorilla was laying down underneath all my clothes. He got away with it but I did not so the next day left home .
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Hello.
ReplyDeleteI would like to know what the boys life before this was, as you explained in great detail, but I believe the gorilla transformation caught a lot of people off guard, bordering on shock humor. I suggest you write more words in the time past the present.
I am a friend,
Gavin