One day when I was walking down the hallway there was a door at the end of the hall near my sisters bedroom door.
“Hmmm, that's different” I say while I go up to the door.
I am super nervous what if there's a monster behind the door. I go right up to the door I twist the handle the door opens I hear a loud scream it was my sister she was behind the door.
“Oh hi sis, do you like my new walk in wardrobe” my sister said.
“Don’t you already have a walk in wardrobe?” I asked...
Wednesday, November 7, 2018
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Hello Natasha, i like your story, but i think you could put more detail into it.
ReplyDeleteHello Natasha, I think you’re story could be pretty good, but only if you tell me what’s going on. I’m sorry, but I just don’t have any idea what in the world is happening. Besides this, your story has a lot of potential, and I give you a thumbs. Sincerely, Gavin.
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