Thursday, November 15, 2018

100WC Week #10 - Zak



I was at the zoo.  I went to look at gorilla at the zoo. But one gorilla  make eyes at me and then he ran and broke the brick wall.  I ran to get help but the gorilla saw my phone.  He ran up to me and took my phone off me and a ran away with my phone.  My grandma looked at the gorilla and the gorilla turned to stone. I couldn’t say anything. “Um um?”

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