Thursday, November 15, 2018

100WC Week #10 - Rita

Wednesday, 31 October 1993. The night of halloween is my favourite time of the year.It was 6:00 pm me and my friend Stacy were heading out.But all of a sudden the news reporter announce that a Gorilla ran through a brick wall and he was chasing down a pretty little girl down Masterton road.¨Oh no That's on our road!¨ Stacy screams.
Then all of a sudden the news report says this girl is wearing a yellow dress about the age of 9.¨Sorry kids No trick or treating this year¨ says Dad.
¨Nooooooooo!¨I scream.

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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousNovember 27, 2018 at 11:36 AM

    Hello, Rita i really like this story, because of the sensory detail. In my opinoun you should look for grammar mistakes and spelling mistakes.

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