On Tuesday the 8 of November i was going on a bush walk with my dad we walk about a kilometer and found a door I wondered what was behind the door. I walked over to the door and opened it and fell in a big hole into a pool of water and I felt a nip on my foot. Then I spotted a ladder that lead back up to the top. I slowly made my way up the ladder to the top and I see dad on his phone checking his messages “dad” I say “I just fell down a hole” cool he says...
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