I heard music coming from upstairs, it was strange music. Definitely not what my little sister listened to, so I went upstairs, I wondered what was behind the door, so I opened the door and saw little gnomes. They were wheeling little wheelbarrows with some sort of strange food in it. Then when I looked up I saw a gnome with a crown playing a weird instrument. Then everything around me when black. I got tied up and kidnapped the wanted me to stay in this land for ever and ever. I heard my mum calling me from the other side of the door, I wanted to stay.
Monday, November 5, 2018
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Hi Olivia,
ReplyDeleteGreat story! What an imaginative interpretation of the prompt phrase. The gnomes tying up your character sounds like the Lilliputians tying up Gulliver in Gulliver's travels- I strongly recommend reading it. Keep up the good work.
Michael (Team 100wc), Coventry, UK
I liked it because it was funny . I think you should make it 100 words not 104.
ReplyDeleteFrom Angelo