RED, it was horrifying then red men holding red sticks with red flames and red
smoke coming off them started to come closer and closer Horrifying I thought.
Flames were in my face and then I realized that I was on fire! I woke and in an
instant my parents were in getting me back into bed and that was when I realized
everything was red I was dreaming and I was on a plate with sauce being poured
over me. My parents were beside me I pinched myself and I woke. Then I got some
milk. It was slurpolicous.
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