Wednesday, November 13, 2019

100WC week#10-Emma

̈ ̈Hey everyone look at my cool  fillet knife,̈ I say as I swing it around. ̈Come and see how sharp it is!¨ I yell out to everyone.I swing it around once more and then it is almost fatal , it gets jabbed in two veins and red blood squirts out! Right now I have lost about one coke can of blood.I see someone dialing something on their phone , I think it is 111 the NZ emergency number. Now someone has got a blanket from their car and wraps it around my arm to stop the bleeding.I pass out.

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