Jack be nimble, Jack be quick, Jack jump over the candlestick. Jack was 7 and loved to jump over things but this story is about his bad accident. Jack was jumping up and down the streets when the big gang of boys came over to him. ”Hey Jack, you like jumping? Well then come with us.” said the leader, Tom. they went up onto the roof of a 5 story building. Tom told him to jump off it. Well Jack jumped and cut open his leg. Red blood stained the footpath. So you must always trust someone good and responsible.
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