My little brother starts kicking me so I kick him back he wakes up and rubbed his tired and sore eyes he starts to yell at me mum screams from down the hallway cut it out you two so we do he has a big stretch he’s walking out to the kitchen and seeing mum putting ginger and apricot jam on my sandwich “no,” he said , “I like Marmite .” you no that don't you a lot of butter and a tiny bit of marmite why can't you get things right around here . he stomps and grabs a piece of toast and slams it in the bin what are you going to do about that .
Sunday, November 17, 2019
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Hi Caitlyn,
ReplyDeleteWell done on your story this week. You have used some great vocabulary and you have used excellent describing words. You little brother sounds like he's not really a morning person! Don't forget to check your writing for punctuation.
Keep up the great writing.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin,
Ireland