Wednesday, November 13, 2019
100WC Week #10 - Laine
There was a pepper. That was as red as a bull about to charge. At a red sign. That was a sign of furious anger. But the orange pepper. Sighed at the red pepper and said your not that hot. .But the orange pepper can´t talk because he is not that hot either. But then the poor lonely green pepper means that there is no anger. At all I feel bad. But at the moment I'm at the red pepper stage I am angry. I am like a animal about to exsplode. But I am strong enough to hold the anger in . And my friend can not hold it in. He is a raging animal. But other people have no anger. It's weird.
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Laine,
ReplyDeleteWonderful way to use the colors to show emotions. Also liked the way you repeated your colors to make sure the reader understood your message. Remember to re-read your writing to check for spelling errors. I love how you compare the colors of papers to emotions and then to people.
Great writing,
Mrs. Komerska
5OR in Illinois USA