Thursday, November 7, 2019
100WC - Week #9 - Liam
Once there were these kids who had a creepy looking doll. They put the doll outside and when the come back in the see the doll holding a knife. So they go back outside put the doll on the stairs and just wait there but they never see it move again so they go back inside and they hear a scream. So they go to it and they see a mum screaming because the dolls in the pram. Then the doll say a little quote ¨The Orange One Spoke First ̈ they run for their life and when they get to the kitchen all the pumpkins were calved and on the wall they saw the baby's blood.
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Liam,
ReplyDeleteYour piece was creepy. I wonder why so many authors are inspired to write suspense-filled scary stories with dolls in the mix?
Were you inspired by other authors' works?
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA