¨Hey Lilly do you want to play some music at my house¨ said Holly.¨Yeah sure¨ replied Lilly ¨let's go.¨ So he two of them set of to Holly´s house. It took them about 15 minutes to get there.¨Come on up to my room¨ said Holly while pushing her older sister out of the way.¨Hey what was that for?¨said Holly's older sister grumpily. Holly didn't reply instead she just looked at her sister.¨Hurry up Holly¨ shouted Lilly. ¨Coming!¨ replied Holly. As Lilly and Holly were listening to music there came this very loud bit it was completely out of tune.¨Ouch that hurt my ears¨ said Lilly.¨Mine too¨ replied Holly.
Thursday, February 14, 2019
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hi emma I really like it so cool
ReplyDeletecharli
hi Emma nice writting i like the part holly pushes her sister.
ReplyDeletebut it the start it just didn't make sence but i just didn't get the meaning of the story
Hi Emma,
ReplyDeleteHolly sounds a bit of a madam! Why did she push her sister? Lilly was good to distract her and mover her on before a huge row erupted.
Keep up the good work,
Ciara (Team 100)
Ireland