Saturday, February 9, 2019

100WC Week #19 - Brooke


The lights were flickering as I walked into a dark black house.I creeped into the garden the rusted paint looked washed all over.I crept back into the house.There were rotten eggs in a brown carton.The couch had a rough fringe that hanged over the side of it,it was a dusty brown colour nobody would have ever thought that couch was good to sit on.  I carried on looking through the house it had a weird looking staircase, I walked up yuck I thought these bedrooms were not very good flies were all over it I really did not like this house at all!

1 comment:

  1. Hi brooke its Emma I really liked your story and all your details.I don´t have anything I think you have to work on.

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