Thursday, February 21, 2019
100WC - week#21 - Genevieve
Look at this bear, it's been left on the sidewalk by a little girl because she had to get to school. She was sad and can’t wait to get back to it, but sadly she forgot about it and it was taken by a storm and landed in a field. Many years pass, this little girl has grandchildren now! The world has changed she takes he grandkids for a walk in the field not knowing about the bear, she found it and started to cry, but out of nowhere, ALIENS JUMPED OUT OF THE BEAR AND ATTACKED THEM! more aliens jumped out of this tiny bear and they proceeded to take over the earth.
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hi gen this is ruby I loved your story maybe next time less aliens and check your spelling. from ruby
ReplyDeleteso more aliens and check my spelling?
Deletehey Gen your story is really crazy when the aliens come out from the teddy bear but i still like it
ReplyDeletethe spelling was bit /he took her grand kids/ great job though
ReplyDeletefrom ruby
wow loved the ailean part
ReplyDeleteHello, Genevieve. I like the concept of aliens,but you need to check your spelling.
ReplyDeleteYour friend, Aden E