Saturday, February 9, 2019

100WC Week #19 - Emma

Indie her mother called I have washed your white shirt now we can go out for brunch. Where should we go?? Ummm I know the FLICKERING FRINGE said indie. OK her mother said with a smile she loves the FLICKERING FRINGE. When they arrived the waitress came and said what would you like. Indie said can I please have Eggs with Blackberries.MMHH said the waitress what about you ma'am.Umm just the same thank you.It took around 20 min for there brunch to be served to them.They ate there brunch quickly then set for home.

2 comments:

  1. I liked how you specified the orders and didn’t say “We would like some food.” I didn’t get what the place looked like and how big it was. This piece was really good.
    From, Mohammad

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  2. hi its Olivia
    it would be more easy to read if you told that the flickering fringe was a resteraunt but i liked how you said brunch

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