Saturday, February 9, 2019

100WC Week #19 - Kate

RING,  “OK first customer,” said Jenny as a customer walked into her restaurant,  this was Jenny's first day on the job, as you could probably tell that she is a little bit nervous. While Jenny was waiting for another customer she saw something moving under the fringe of the couch, just then she had the shivers down her back thinking it was an alien, then all of a sudden a black cat popped out. Just then jenny remembered that in a book she reading black cats were bad luck! “Ohh” she said that’s why the lights were flickering and the eggs were broken, after that she washed the cat thinking all the bad luck will go away, and it did.

2 comments:

  1. hi kate I really like how you discibed how the customer walked in and jenny felt nervous i think you might have missed out the word was because it says she reading anyway I loved your story from caitlyn

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  2. cat i liked how used black cats are bad luck
    but next time add more detail. :)
    kind regards
    Liam

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