In the holidays my friend Kyralee was doing a singing show. There was a whole lot of people the whole place was full. So Kyralee got ready because she was straight after her dad. After her dad finished she went up on stage and done her thing. Straight after were these twins singing. It was completely out of tune! Kyralee says to me “they were out of tune they were out of tune” Later on we have a snack, we have some marshmallows and crackers. I loved it it was so fun but then Kyra had to go home.
Thursday, February 14, 2019
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Great job Keira I really liked how it was a real situation but next time trying pulling the readers in a bit more
ReplyDeleteit is good but it dosent make sence in some places other than that it is great. ccgndcbcndduifuicb as my brother would say. he he he!
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