Saturday, February 23, 2019
100WC Week #21 Lachlan W
In the city by a traffic light there are some cars going past and on a path way there’s a teddy. A little girl who lost it when she was walking with her Mum and dropped it. She didn't now she lost it she put it in her mums bag and it fell out and her mum didn't see it sad that she really lost her bear and really wants it back to her so she can hug it again. She is wanting her mum to go back and get it again so she can be happy again.
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A sad story that we hope will have a happy ending with the little girl and her mum going back to find the teddy bear.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your story. It touched my heart.