Thursday, February 21, 2019

100WC - Week #21 - Natasha Dalton

Part II : the town 


We had arrived in a little town. “What I didn’t know that there was a town here” I said. “Let's find a place to stay for the night there should be a hotel somewhere in this town” said my Dad. We kept on walking then I saw a teddy on the path and a girl riding away on her bike.  So I picked up the toy and ran after her yelling “wait, your toy” then she stopped and I gave her the toy. “Thanks” she said hugging the toy. I ran back to my parents when my dad said “look..."

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4 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2019 at 12:01 PM

    hi Natasha this is gracy I really liked your story but I think you used the word toy to much

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2019 at 5:10 PM

    hi Natasha Emma here
    I loved your story you are a great writer and I think that you should keep up the good work.There is not really anything you need to work on.
    kind regards Emma

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  3. AnonymousFebruary 26, 2019 at 4:31 PM

    I'm so pleased you managed to reunite the girl with her bear Natasha. I wonder what discovery dad has made - perhaps ....
    * Something had fallen out of it as you picked it up?
    * The bear turned around with a wave of thanks to you?
    * The girl and bear had changed places and the bear was riding the bike with a toy girl sitting on the handlebars?

    Isn't writing wonderful. You can make any idea come alive in your reader's mind!

    Thanks for sharing,
    Jackie (Team 100WC)
    New Plymouth

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  4. UnknownFebruary 27, 2019 at 5:57 PM

    Well Done Natasha,Keep up your good work

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