Thursday, February 28, 2019
100WC-week-#22-Brendan
One day my mum and I where making onion dip, I put the reduce cream in, then I put the onion soup packet in. But I accidently spilled the vinegar in the bowl, so I quickly mixed it up before my mum came, then we leave the onion dip in the fridge for 30 minutes. After we went to the supermarket to get some chips, then we went home to eat the chip and dip. When we got home we had it but the vinegar was to sharp so we had to throw it away.
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Hi Brendan
ReplyDeleteYou have been careful in your description of events, making sure you included all of the relevant steps. I can only imagine how disappointing it must have been to have to throw away the dip when you had probably spent all that time looking forward to eating it with your chips.
Miss T Team 100wc
I like the concept od Orion dip, but you need to fix your grammar and comma placing. Your friend, Aden
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