Wednesday, February 27, 2019

100WC - Week #22 - Harvey Cabug



When We went to the shop we got soy sauce and vinegar which is the both flavors inside of it. After at the market when we were starting dinner it has meat, vegetables and more. later I put both vinegar and soy sauce a lot in a half of the food in my plate and when i ate it and it  was painfully and said ...the vinegar was too sharp… my tongue was bleeding out lof it it and it was too painful and my parents put me to the doctor and the doctor told me never ever both flavors again


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  2. Oh my, what a story, Harvey! A great moral here - never have too much mix of vinegar and soy sauce!.

    I liked the way you put the prompt into your story and the second use of the word 'painful' worked nicely.

    Something you could think about for next time, may be to re-read what you have written out loud, to check that it all makes sense.

    Keep it up! Can't wait to read more :)

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    1. well i made it up and it was just a story buts its not real also thanks about that hayley your a very good person

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  3. Harvey-
    Your main character ran into flavor overload! Interesting angle to write about. Have you ever had too many flavors attack your mouth? Hope he makes it out okay.
    Ms. McBride #team100wc Los Angeles

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    1. nope i made it up my own way but only got three mistakes and my own made it up writing is very hard for me but its to late to make it fixed my writing

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    2. by the way my replies does not make any sense

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