“Where are we?” I whispered. Me and Ruby had got
kidnapped to where a big mansion stood. We both had a walk around the building
and came to a stop near a candy bar. Ruby jumped in and she saw a sign that
said: stairs. We ran up the stairs and found a door. We jump out
of it without thinking. We start to fall. I caught a branch then grasped Ruby’s
hand. The branch snaps and we fall into a river. When we swim to land we are in
candy land! Oh what a sweet way to live forever.
Sunday, March 17, 2019
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Well done on your story this week Abby. I glad that things turned out well! Ending up in Candy land after a creepy visit to the big mansion!
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin Ireland