Me and my sister Alexis were going to the mall to buy some stuff. We went all over then I see this really pretty dress “Alexis Alexis please buy me that blue dress i want it so badly” I beg.
“Fine fine I will get you the dress” she says looking like she won’t do it.
I get so excited then I see her coming back with a box and when I open it it is a huge big brown hairy dress “Hey it is terrible I don't want to look like Chewbacca”
“What I didn't know what was wrong with it “
“But it is the wrong colour!”
I run in and scream I didn't get the right colour so they give me a box and when I open it there is a blue dress key chain i get so angry and give up but then when I get home my mum comes and says “APRIL FOOLS” and she gets out the dress and gives it to me I have the best day ever
“Fine fine I will get you the dress” she says looking like she won’t do it.
I get so excited then I see her coming back with a box and when I open it it is a huge big brown hairy dress “Hey it is terrible I don't want to look like Chewbacca”
“What I didn't know what was wrong with it “
“But it is the wrong colour!”
I run in and scream I didn't get the right colour so they give me a box and when I open it there is a blue dress key chain i get so angry and give up but then when I get home my mum comes and says “APRIL FOOLS” and she gets out the dress and gives it to me I have the best day ever
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