Thursday, March 7, 2019

100WC - Genevieve - Week#23

There was a man named Jim, He was fixing up his house, he had to work on his roof so he grabbed his red ladder, put it up on the pavement and got to work. Afterwhile he noticed something….. Shiny? Near him he looked a bit closer and it was a pile of gold coins! He was trying to be as careful as he possibly could be reached for them remembering about the lake that was next to his house next thing he knew he was sinking in the lake and couldn’t do anything about it.
The Weird, Weird End






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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousMarch 14, 2019 at 12:59 PM

    I like that you say the weird weird end
    but i think you need to add some full stops but the commars are good

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