Ok Kids were here at the camp I hope y'all are excited! Said camping teacher. Ooo Yea me too! Said max. Ok kids now who's ready for a scary campfire story? But should i really do this? Do a campfire story too scary. I'm good, said mike. Scardy cat said max.
LOOK WHO'S TALKING WEIRDO! Said mike. THAT'S ENOTH! I…I THUNDER STORM. Runnn! (7 minutes later) Ok i think it's over The bus is broken! Great, said mike. I did see a circus over in the distance. Ok everyone Lets get past these bear traps. Ok creeee I almost fell on a bear trap. Ok we made it to the circus! Wait.. AHH.
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